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學會建立託福寫作模板切忌全盤背誦寫作範文

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託福寫作考試中,想要取得高分,那麼考生一定要在語言上引起足夠的重視。那麼考生應該如何去做呢?在這裏小編爲大家介紹學會建立託福寫作模板切忌全盤背誦寫作範文,希望對大家提高託福寫作成績有幫助。

學會建立託福寫作模板切忌全盤背誦寫作範文

 學會建立託福寫作模板 切忌全盤背誦寫作範文

其實,在託福寫作的備考過程中,全盤去背誦一些託福寫作的範文和託福寫作模板,是一件非常危險的事情。原因很簡單,對於託福寫作的審閱官來說,他們可以說是見過無數的託福寫作文章,如果見到文章中的內容再一次與之前審閱的內容有“撞車”,那就難免會涉及到有抄襲的嫌疑,影響到了自己最後的託福寫作的得分。所以,在託福寫作練習的過程中,全盤去背誦一些高分模板和範文是並不可取的。那麼,我們又該怎樣去進行練習寫作呢?

在初入托福寫作練習的時候,相信很多人都會說到:沒有一個模板根本不知道從何入手。那麼這時就建議大家,不如自己創作一個原創的託福寫作模板。這樣不但可以避免內容撞車的危險,同時,自己在創作的過程中也會產生一種記憶,不用過多花費心思去記憶模板內容。比如以下這樣的例子,

There is a discussion about主題. Some people may be right to think that the best way is to我的觀點. From my point of view,I cannot agree more on that statement because under the circumstance that背景,原因1 and原因2.

Admittedly,we can not deny that我的觀點有缺點/另一個觀點有優點. Nevertheless,such is human nature that自己的內容例子,and it paves the way to the best solution to主題.

而對於很多剛開始練習託福寫作的同學來說,託福寫作中字數問題,也是讓大家頗感頭疼的。但是,從以上的例子中,我們也是不難看出,如果建立好一個完整的模板之後,在模板中已經有了150字左右的內容。在正式的寫作過程中,每段只要寫不到100字,感覺會是比較輕鬆的。當然。如果想要衝刺到託福寫作的高分,我們還需要調整好模板中的句型,學會如何使用好語態變化,形式主語,雙重否定,倒裝的複雜句等等。

總之,在托福考試前準備好一些寫作模板是非常有幫助的。但是,還是建議大家花時間準備自己的模板,切忌全盤套用。

  託福寫作中有哪些詞彙選擇技巧

作文考試的目的在於通過這一命題形式,檢測考生的語言功底。TOEFL作文考試也不例外,它歸根結底仍是一種語言水平考試,運用英語進行書面表達的能力是測試的終極目的。

英文寫作反映考生綜合運用英語語言的能力,只有在宏觀和微觀兩個方面都把握得當才能構成一篇完美的TOEFL作文。這裏的宏觀是就一篇文章的框架結構而言的,而微觀是指一篇文章的語篇要素,即文章中表達意義的微觀單位,包括單詞、短語和句子。語篇要素運用的純熟,能很好地反映一個人的語言修養,準確的用詞、多樣化的句式結構以及精妙得體的修辭會使整篇文章熠熠生輝,極富感染力。TOEFL作文考試作爲一種語言測試方式,其重點在於考查考生的英語語言水平,對語篇要素的把握在寫作TOEFL作文的過程當中無疑是至關重要的。熟練恰當地運用語篇要素會令你的作文妙筆生花,卓爾不羣。

  託福寫作語詞的選擇

寫作中用詞不準確是很容易犯的毛病,good,terrible,see,nice,kind,greatly,think,know,something等詞彙在學生作文中反覆出現。這些詞本身並沒有問題,是英語常用詞,但是它們表達的意思過於模糊,很多情況下,應該使用意義更加準確的詞。況且,學生老是使用這幾個詞會給人以表達形式單調,詞彙量貧乏,文章缺乏感染力的印象。下面的一些例子,通過換用一、兩個準確生動的詞語或是運用一些固定搭配及習語就使整個句子增色不少。

1。Original: Solving trivial problems in the dorm will add your social experience and help you to understand other people’s feelings and learn to be kind。

Revised: Solving trivial problems in the dorm will enrich your social experience and help you to understand other people’s feelings and learn to be considerate。

亮點評析

add,kind表達的含義都比較寬泛。add可以指數量上的增加,也可以指程度的加強,對於“豐富經驗、增加知識”這個意思,用enrich會使表達更準確。kind從字面意義上講是“好的、善良的”,用kind來形容人無法具體地表現出一個人的性格特徵到底怎樣,原句中是想表達“考慮周到、體貼入微”的特點,要準確表達這個含義應選擇considerate。

2。 Original: Science and technology have greatly influenced our lives and our society is changing very rapidly。

Revised: Science and technology have come to pervade every aspect of our lives and, as a result, society is changing at a speed which is quite unprecedented。

亮點評析

greatly,rapidly屬於常用詞,表示程度高、速度快,這樣的詞在表達效果上不夠具體,缺乏說服力,在修改後的句子中用了pervade every aspect of our lives就具體生動地表現出科技的影響力到底有多大,其影響力已滲透到我們生活的方方面面,at a speed which is quite unprecedented意爲“以一種前所未有的速度”,形象地道出了變化速度之快。

3。 Original: Young people tend to think that real life is as nice and interesting as it is in the novels and movies, while more experienced adults think this kind of naive daydream will only be destroyed by later experiences and every one should learn to get used to common everyday life。

Revised: Young people tend to think that real life is as dramatic and fascinating as it is in the novels and movies, while more experienced adults think this kind of naive daydream will only be destroyed by later experiences and every one should learn to get used to tedious everyday life。

亮點評析

nice,interesting,common都屬於普通詞彙,用到句子中也顯得平淡蒼白。nice的意思是“好的,令人愉快的”,interesting是“有趣的”,這兩個詞都不能準確地描繪出年輕人所憧憬的美好生活,句中想表達的是年輕人認爲生活如同小說、電影一般充滿戲劇變化,激動人心,要體現這層含義應該用dramatic,fascinating。dramatic表示“刺激的,戲劇性的,給人深刻印象的”,fascinating表示“具有強烈吸引力的,迷人的,使人神魂顛倒的”,這兩個詞的程度要比nice,interesting深得多,表現力也更強。原句用common表達實際的現實生活的枯燥無味是不準確的,common的意思是“普通的,平常的”,普通平常的東西不一定是枯燥的,tedious是表示“(因過長、過慢或單調)令人厭倦的,煩人的”,恰好傳達出現實生活由於瑣碎和重複而變得索然無味這種含義。

4。 Original: You should compete to live in this society。

Revised: You should compete for survival; otherwise, you will be thrown out of the tide of society。

亮點評析

原句平平淡淡,只是告訴人們要在社會立足,必須競爭,但這樣一句簡單的勸告似乎缺乏說服力,修改後的句子用了compete for survival,爲了生存而競爭,而且後面又添加了一個並列分句,補充說明了如果不compete的後果就是be thrown out of the tide of society,被社會的浪潮所淘汰,使用這些更加具體深刻的詞彙能夠形象生動地表現出競爭的慘烈。

5。Original: I really believe that smoking is harmful to people’s health。

Revised: I have a profound conviction that smoking is harmful to people’s health。

亮點評析

conviction的意思是“堅定的看法或信仰”,have a profound conclusion表示對某種看法深信不疑,作文中提出觀點的句子用have a profound conclusion會比用believe態度更堅決,立場更鮮明,而且believe這個詞非常簡單,是英語初學者就應掌握的詞彙,換成have a profound conclusion立即增加了句子的複雜程度,體現了較強的語言運用能力。類似的提出觀點的表達還有:

I hold a point of view that…

I hold the opinion that…

6。Original: We know that sometimes success is measured by how much money you earn。

Revised: It does not surprise us to discover that sometimes success is measured in terms of the money you earn。

亮點評析

如上句的believe一樣,know也是非常初級的詞彙,作文中出現I believe that…,I know that…這樣的表達只能體現考生寫作技巧的稚嫩,用It does not surprise us to discover that…替換We know that…並沒有改變原句的含義,卻使全句頓時增添了亮點。

7。Original: We all know that most factories would be of no use if there were not clean water supply。

Revised: It goes without saying that most factories would be of no use if there were not clean water supply。

亮點評析

同上例一樣,know這樣的初級詞彙應避免在作文中使用,It goes without saying that…是一個固定結構,意思是“……是不言而喻的”,常在作文中用來引經據典或表明一個盡人皆知的道理,類似的表達還有:

An old saying goes that…

Proverb goes that…

It is universally acknowledged that…

It is generally accepted that…

8。Original: Some other people think that people should read extensively。

Revised: Another position says that people should read extensively。

亮點評析

同know,believe一樣,think也應該儘量避免使用,修改後的句子中是用Another position says that…代替think提出另一種觀點,也可以用hold a point of view,hold the opinion這樣的短語替換。

9。Original: The unexpected win of the match give us confidence。

Revised: The unexpected win of the match boost our confidence。

亮點評析

give也屬於英語中最初級、最基本的詞彙,只表示“給,給予”這個動作,不涉及動作的性質和狀態,若表示增添信心,增強士氣,比較地道的說法是用boost confidence/morale,如:The change of management has boosted morale throughout the company。 管理模式的改變使整個公司上下士氣倍受鼓舞。

10。Original: The use of drugs has increased greatly in the last ten years。

Revised: The use of drugs has increased significantly in the last ten years。

亮點評析

greatly是一般用語,表示程度高,“很,非常”,使用相當普遍而沒有新意,在寫作中應儘量避免使用這些通俗而又陳舊的詞彙,應換用一些更加正式,更有說服力的詞語,例如significantly表示達到了非常重要的或可觀的程度,“重大的,可觀的”,能夠具體說明藥品使用方面,增長幅度巨大。significantly還可以替換成considerably,tremendously等,同樣具有不錯的表達效果。

  如何構建託福寫作的骨架

I 準確的句子表達

1. 句型分析

英語的句型包括以下幾種,簡單句、複合句、並列句、並列複合句等。在新託福寫作中,一般使用複合句,輔以並列句和並列複合句,當然肯定要有簡單句,做到長短句相結合。下面摘抄幾個句子給大家認識並分析一下複合句和並列複合句。

a. Even though I usually know what I have to say, I cannot always express myself correctly in English.

這句話是一個複合句,由even though引導的讓步狀語從句。

b. This challenges me to practice my spoken English, with the result that I can complete the speaking tasks more fluently and quickly.

這句話中是一個複合句。with介詞結構中,有一個that引導的同位語從句對result進行解釋說明。

c. I think this is less than ideal because any differences in opinion become personal conflicts, and therefore that might jeopardize the employee’s job.

託福寫作輔導指出上句話是一個並列複雜句。and 連接了兩個句子,是一個並列句;because引導的原因狀語從句。

d. Shallow writing is indicative of weak critical-thinking skills, and such writing, which is often described as “sophomoric”, receives low mark.

這句話同樣是並列複雜句。由and連接兩個句子,成爲並列句,再一個which引導的定語從句。

2. 有問題的託福寫作句子的列舉

託福寫作中的句子容易出現三個問題:一是使用破碎句,二是使用接連句,三是句子連接不正確。

1). 破碎句

所謂破碎句,就是句子不完整,通常是沒有謂語(或者說謂語是動詞的非謂語形式,如分詞),或者是從句單獨成句。

破碎句:She singing alone. (無謂語,singing是現在分詞)

正確句:She is singing alone.

破碎句:He did not come. Because he was sick. (從句單獨成句)

正確句:He did not come because he was sick.

2).接連句

所謂接連據,就是兩個句子直接連在一起,既未使用連詞,也未使用正確的標點符號。

接連句: Professionals such as lawyers or accountants usually work longer hours than factory workers they have greater freedom in planning their time.

正確句一: Professionals such as lawyers or accountants usually work longer hours than factory workers. However, they have greater freedom in planning their time.

正確句二: Professionals such as lawyers or accountants usually work longer hours than factory workers; however, they have greater freedom in planning their time.

3).句子連接不正確

所謂託福 寫作句子連接不正確,就是兩個獨立的句子之間以逗號連接,這是不合英語語法的。正確的做法是以連詞、分號、冒號、句號等連接兩個句子。

不正確句: Breaking chalk into two pieces is a physical change, there is no change in the composition of the chalk.

正確句: Breaking chalk into two pieces is a physical change, so there is no change in the composition of the chalk.

II 高分表達

除了在句式上長短句相結合準確表達外,小馬過河建議新托福考生要使用一些特殊的句式,以使句型多樣化。句型多樣化也是作文得到高分的條件之一。除了我們之前經常提到的高分句式,如倒裝句、強調句、狀語前置、插入語等,筆者還提出另外一個句式的多樣變化,即主語多樣化。下面筆者將列舉幾個句子概括介紹前面四種句型,而重點分析主語多樣化。

正常句: Luck only works in extreme cases.

倒裝句: Only in extreme cases does luck work.(否定詞位於句首的倒裝。)

正常句: The internet provides people access to the latest information.

強調句: It is the internet that provides people access to the latest information. (強調the internet)

正常句: The environment has been deteriorating severely along with the development of industry.

狀語前置句: Along with the accelerating development of industry, the environment has been deteriorating severely.

正常句: However, new zoos try to duplicate animals’ natural habitats as much as possible and give animals a comfortable amount of space.

插入語: New zoos, however, try to duplicate animals’ natural habitats as much as possible and give animals a comfortable amount of space. (連詞however做插入語)

主語多樣

1. 她突然想到了一個主意。

She suddenly had an idea.

通常情況下,考生會馬上對這句話進行翻譯,基本不會動句子結構。但是以人作爲主語的英語句子總是不能夠很吸引人,所以這個句子如果稍微做下修改,以後面的賓語“主意”做主語,這個句子會發生一些變化。

2. 他開車心不在焉,幾乎闖禍。

He was absent-minded when driving, and almost caused an accident.

這句話依然是拿人做主語,稍微改一下,把心不在焉這個形容詞的名詞形式做主語,會大不相同。

His absence of mind during driving nearly caused an accident.

3. 美利堅合衆國創立於1789年。

The United States of America was founded in 1789.

這句話沒有任何錯誤,但是不夠多樣,可以用時間作主語。

The year 1789 witnessed the founding of the United States of America.

III 實用句型

在託福 寫作文章的最後,爲大家列舉幾個新托福考試中可以使用的套用句型,爲一些寫句子摸不着頭緒的考生提供幫助。

1. It pays to make great efforts to prepare for TOEFL-ibt.

努力準備新托福考試是值得的。

2. Nothing is more important than to receive education.

沒有比接受教育更重要的了。

3. The reason why the white-collars suffer increasing work-related stress is that they pursue work achievement in career.

白領壓力日益增加的原因是他們在事業上有所追求。

4. It is time the related department took proper measures.

(虛擬句式)相關部門早該採取適當的措施了)

託福寫作範文:當老友做出不當舉措是否應該維持友誼

託福獨立寫作題目

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

If you and someone have been friends for a long time, you continue your friendship even if she does something you don’t like.

在老友做出一些讓我們不開心的舉措時,我們是否還要繼續這段友誼

託福獨立寫作範文

One of the most beautiful qualities of true friendship is to understand and to be understood. Thus when exposed to the topic whether we should try to keep the friendship when something unhappy occurs, I strongly contend that we should.

Nothing will be completely perfect in the world. Everyone was born to be a distinctive individual. We have different family education, growing up experiences, as well as characteristics, which gradually result in our possessing different values. Therefore our tastes and behaviors can never be the same. And thus it is quite acceptable that our friends may do something that we do not like, because they are not us. If we are looking for a friend who will never make us annoyed , we are not going to find one in reality. Besides it’s hardly a fair criticism that our friends have errors. We have never been close to perfect and sometimes it might be our faults . Once I read a short story about how to get along well with each other between two friends. And let’s call one girl Ann and the other Lucy. Ann did not like eating eggs while Lucy did. So every-time when Ann got one egg, she would directly give it to Lucy. However, one day when Ann wanted to have a taste of the egg, she just kept the egg without giving it to Lucy, which made Lucy quite angry. From this story, I think all of us need to ponder deeply over a question whether we have taken what our friends do for us for granted.

Besides, a considerate attitude is a must in true friendship. When something unhappy happens, we often tend to blame others. And in most cases, this way will worsen an embarrassing situation. The wise way is to examine ourselves first. Sometimes it is we who need to apologize to our friends. In other cases, if we realize our friends really make mistakes which quite hurt us, it is advisable that we tell them in a harmless way. I believe this is the most desirable method which can deepen our friendship,enable our friends to perfect themselves as well as make us more popular.

Finally, friends are lights in winter: the older the friend, the brighter the h Waldo Emerson once said “It is one of the blessings of old friends that you can afford to be stupid with them”. Old friends are our valuable treasures. They are the ones who know our merits and demerits, who encourage us when we get depressed, who pick us up when we fall down, and who will company us when we are alone. If one day, they offend us by doing something we do not like, what we are supposed to do is figuring out what’s wrong with our friendship and doing our best to continue it instead of just blaming our friends or breaking up the friendship.

In a word, friendship will probably never be perfect, but that’s a small price to pay for what it does offer and we need to be responsible for maintaining it no matter what happens.

學會建立託福寫作模板 切忌全盤背誦寫作範文

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