雅思寫作：怎麼做才能不被發現有套模板的嫌疑
雅思寫作屬於雅思考試四部分比較難提高的，往往有一些雅思老師雅思聽力都考的好拿滿分，可雅思習作就拿7分左右 ，雅思寫作它之所以難就是難在缺少方法，在雅思寫作備考的時候，就能找到很多的雅思寫作的模板 ，模板可以借鑑但是不能被考官發現是被套模板的，這樣雅思寫作就不能拿模板了，下面小編就給大家分享：雅思寫作：怎麼做才能不被發現有套模板的嫌疑把模板裏面的東西經過自己的靈巧運用，變成全新的，變成完全是自己獨一無二的東西
雅思寫作：怎麼做才能不被發現有套模板的嫌疑
一、分析
真題鏈接：In some countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
以上是劍橋中的考試真題，相信大家都已經非常熟悉了。我們就一起結合此題，對雙邊結構的整體文章結構和遣詞造句做一個簡單的對比。
1.引言段
引言段是通篇作文的開篇之作，對於它的寫法多種多樣。但是無論怎樣書寫，切忌出現以下模式性的語句樣式：
模板語言：
Nowadays, the discussion about ……is a very controversial one. Those who criticize……. argue that……, but people who advocate……, on the other hand, maintain that……
這樣的模板相信大家不會陌生，它曾經受到無數考生的青睞。但是我們說過，這樣過於機械的語言，很難體現出考生對考題文字的理解，更爲糟糕的是，你的開頭有可能和無數人是重複的!
下面我們就做一個簡單的對比：
非模板語言：
No matter in which country, children are, without any exception, regarded as the protected in society, not to mention making them involved in any forms of paid-work(調用背景知識，引出話題) necessity of allowing them to make Money with their own hands is indeed worth discussing(結合對考題文字的統一轉換，自然流露雙邊討論傾向)
2.主體段
模板語言：
1. The benefits of…… can be perceived in many aspects.
In the first place, 分論點一. For instance, 例證 / 語言論證。In the second place, 分論點二. 論證.
2. However, ……has also given rise to a lot of problems.
For one thing,……For another……, Finally,……
在傳統的模板裏，雙邊結構的主體段只是簡單地分段論證兩方面的觀點，雖然將兩種對立觀點展現的非常清晰，但是也難免落入模式化的俗套。
做一個簡單的對比：
非模板語言：
a.讓步分析
Admittedly, hardship and bitterness of life could drive people to become mature. Under working pressure, children think about finishing their tasks
before the deadline instead of concerning how to kill their seemingly limitless free time. Work may be the only priority of their life. It is fairly different
between taking a dollar from their parents and earning one by themselves. Only the tough reality can force them to get rid of selfishness and
dependence on their parents, which is exactly one of the most urgently needed cures in parental education.
雙邊結構的一個重要特點就是雙邊論證兩種觀點，在這篇文章裏可以先讓步論證一個觀點，這樣可以爲後一個觀點的論證提供很好的對比。
b.轉折過渡+提出觀點
However, everything is mixed blessing. Employing children to work should be viewed as a harsh treatment and abuse to them. Kids, after all, unlike
adults, are immature both physically and psychologically. They are extremely vulnerable to both occupational hazards and social evils. More
importantly, children are at the golden age for learning not only due to their brain structure but also their curiosity and desire for knowledge. It goes
without saying that the silly action permitting children to work for financial reasons is ridiculous.
雙邊結構的第二段要論述對立面的觀點，但是不同於上一段的是，此段不僅要充分的客觀陳述一種觀點同時還要帶有觀點傾向，因爲要完成文章的第二個任務---
提出自己的觀點。筆者認爲這樣的觀點提法比較自然，不需要另起一段提出而顯得比較呆板。
3.結尾段
模板語言：
In the final analysis, I concede that to some extent whether the ultimate effect of phenomena is good or not, one thing is certain that phenomenon
in itself is neither good nor bad. And it is the uses to which it is put that determine its value to society. I am convinced that___________.
做一個簡單的對比：
非模板語言：
In conclusion, although there lies various excuses for letting the young children work for salary, it is pointless that this way could benefit them in
terms of accumulating work experience and learning the meaning of responsibility. (自然流露觀點傾向)
作爲雙邊結構作文的結尾，需要總結全文，即主體段兩段的大意，同時要結合題目本身的特點提出鮮明的個人觀點。
雅思寫作範文：手機反社會?
Task：The use of mobile phone in certain places is just as antisocial as smoking. do you think mobile should be banned like smoking?
Sample answer：
Since the first mobile phone was invented, this technology has already changed our lives. However, while it gains its popularity, a lot of criticism also follow. Personally, I believe that it should not be banned.
We cannot avoid the fact that the mobile phone brings much convenience to our lives. In the old times, if we want to contact with a friend in a distant place, we may write a letter, which will take more than half a month before he gets the letter. But with the help of the mobile phone, we can get the connection with our friends in less than 10 seconds. In addition, the mobile phone is able to achieve many features, such as shopping online, GPS, buying tickets and so on, which not only saves our time and spending, but also brings much more entertainment.
At the same time, mobile phone industry creates great quantity of business opportunities. In the past one decade, mobile phones are sold by hundreds, bu thousand, by million and provides unaccountable jobs in the modern world as well. For example, according to a survey, Samsung has made great contribution to Korean’s GDP. However, the mobile phone also has an effect on our physical and mental health. As we all know, if we insist to play digital games on our phones, we may suffer some eye diseases unless we realise its harmfulness. To make thins worse, nowadays many people would prefer to spend their time with some virtual friends rather than keep their families accompanied in reality.
In conclusion, I consider it has more benefits than drawbacks. If the mobile phone is used at a right place and right time, it still can be put into excellent usefulness.
(287 words)
雅思寫作範文：手機影響讀寫能力
Task：Some people believe that the increasing use of the computers and the mobile phones has a negative effect on young people’s reading and writing skill，do you agree or disagree?
Sample answer：
Some educators have warned that the prevalence of mobile phones and the internet has a negative effect on adolescents’ academic ability. I agree with this view.
Firstly, the wide use of “Internet English” is regarded as the culprit of the declining writing skills. One obvious reason is that young adults may make some grammatical mistakes unconsciously because of the frequent use of improper abbreviations and punctuation on mobile devices, and this might pose a threat to their future career where a professional writing ability is required in most companies. Therefore, many linguists have expressed their concerns that the instant messaging and chatting on mobile phones might harm the ability of using formal written English.
Secondly, the poor reading proficiency can be put down to the frequent use of technologies as well. Compared to the older generation, young people today are cluttered with different gadgets, like iPad and iPhone. For instance, with easy access to wifi, they can surf the internet anywhere and anytime to follow the latest information of their idols in another country. However, most social network deliver fragment and useless information, which not only steals time way from solitary reading but also undermine the ability to think independently. In my opinion, this phenomenon should be reversed as soon as possible because reading has a profound effect on a nation’s future.
In conclusion, while these electronic devices make the communication much more convenient, I am in the camp that they might affect young people’s academic performance negatively.
(248 words)
